Saturday, September 06, 2008

The Art of Slur

Today's "Say What?" at the Doonesbury Daily Dose has that line from Georgia Republican Rep. Lynn Westmoreland that's been making the rounds:

Just from what little I've seen of her and Mr. Obama, Sen. Obama, they're a member of an elitist-class individual that thinks that they're uppity.
Oh, good lord. Look, if you're going to traffic in racist slurs, you could at least get the grammar right.
  1. They're a member links a plural subject and verb (they are) with a singular complement (a member). Try They're members.
  2. They are members of an individual does not make sense, whether the individual be "elitist-class" or otherwise. You seem to be tangling up They are members of an elitist class with They are elitist individuals. Perhaps you are trying to cram too many slurs into one sentence. It would be advisable to focus on clearly communicating one slur at a time, at least until you have had more practice handling sophisticated thoughts. This is what teachers usually recommend for elementary students, and there's no reason it can't work for you, too.
  3. The last part adds an extra layer of confusion. Is it the Obamas who think that they (themselves) are uppity? Is it their class that thinks that they (the Obamas) are uppity? Does their class think that it itself is uppity? The pronoun references here are really a mess. If I remember my racist slurs correctly, it's usually someone other than the black people thinking that the black people are uppity; if this is what you mean, then you could easily both clarify and shorten the slur by just using the adjective uppity. You could also shorten the bulky elitist-class individuals to just elitists. What do you think?
  4. It would also be helpful to add a subject and verb that go better with the long introductory phrase. Something like I think that or They seem to be would be appropriate.
Now, putting these suggestions together, here are four possibilities for getting your slur across more clearly, correctly, and effectively:
  1. Just from what little I've seen of her and Mr. Obama, Sen. Obama, I think that they're members of an uppity elitist class.
  2. Just from what little I've seen of her and Mr. Obama, Sen. Obama, I think that they're uppity members of an elitist class.
  3. Just from what little I've seen of her and Mr. Obama, Sen. Obama, they seem to be uppity elitist-class individuals.
  4. Just from what little I've seen of her and Mr. Obama, Sen. Obama, they seem to be uppity elitists.
What do you think? I think that #4, the shortest, is also the best; I rather like the pithy punch of uppity elitists at the end—from a purely rhetorical point of view, anyway. C'mon, Republicans! I expect that you'll be offering plenty of similar slurs against Senator Obama and his wife in the coming weeks; the least you could do is to put some effort into making them clearer and more grammatically correct. After all, slurs are pretty much all you've got going for you after eight years of Bush-Cheney misrule; you'd best master the alchemy involved in turning these turds into diamonds for yourselves, or you're sunk.


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